A bad dream of me

its a really nice poem ^.^
but may be you could describe a little bit mose of the feelings. why it is hot? i havent understand that...

wow schön!

oooh I'm sorry....
this is Swetha not pan_chan_achu!!!
I just logged in with my bro's nick...*accidently v.v"""*

Hi Yuma^^
I've just found ur poem now^^V Good job^^
I love the rhymes throughout the whole poem^^V
In my opinion it would have sounded better if you had written something else instead "say to myself"...That sounds pretty German^^""
"convinced myself" or "and figured..."...well, I'm not a artist^^" I just think..it sounds a lil weird...
Anyway, good job^^

Swetha
P.S: I would appreciate if you read my one and only poem, too....^^"

i dont know if u just wrote in english or if u re a native english speaker, so i ll speak in english. in u re describtion u said, that ur story is prosa, but it isnt prosa it s lyrik...i just wanted to that but the poem is nice

what a wunderfull poem *smile*
i love it.
have you written more of this poem's?
your
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