I think I love him.
Erstellt: 20.08.2012
Letzte Änderung: 21.08.2012
Letzte Änderung: 21.08.2012
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4909 Wörter, 3 Kapitel
4909 Wörter, 3 Kapitel
Thema: Eigene Serie
Meine Charactere sind Lee Joon (Lee Changsun)und Mir (Bang Cheolyong) aus der koreanischen Band MBLAQ. Achtet bitte nicht auf meine Grammatik Q.Q ich weiß ich bin nicht so gut in Englisch! ._. Ich freu mich wenn ihr nette Kommentare dalasst und mir sagt wie ihr sie findet ^-^ ... Tut mir leid wenn sie anfangs etwas Langweilig ist, aber es ist meine erste FF und ich musste mich ersteinmal reinfinden x_x
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| ~komplette Fanfic~ | V: 20.08.2012 U: 21.08.2012 |
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| Kapitel 1 Chapter 1. | E: 21.08.2012 U: 21.08.2012 |
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Bang Cheolyong
-Bang, Cheolyong
-Nickname: Mir, Mireu
-19 years old
-pupil at the Kyung Hee Cyber University
-hate english&school
-love dancing, rapping&eating also he forget it often
~playful,clever­ -
Lee Changsun
-Lee, Changsun
-Nickname: Joon, Joonie
-22 years old
-trainee at Mireu's school
-loves cooking, modern furniture, dancing and singing
~much selfconfidence&polite
Kommentare zu dieser Fanfic (1)
Well, I did not read everything. I'm sorry but I think your grammerer is really terrible. Okay, you gave that hint in the introduction, but that does not excuse that you did not intervene and find someone who corrects it (second reader).
It is great to see you practice the language, but it doesn't help you, if nobody tells you where you made mistakes.
If you were not cheating by using dict.leo.org, your language skills are pretty good and the orthography as well.
Try to improve it. You're on the right way, English is fun! :)
It is great to see you practice the language, but it doesn't help you, if nobody tells you where you made mistakes.
If you were not cheating by using dict.leo.org, your language skills are pretty good and the orthography as well.
Try to improve it. You're on the right way, English is fun! :)
