the crime of a first kiss

Ich liebe die ff *o* Ruki und Rei sind so süß zusammen<3 Das ist dem zug ist echt heiß auf so ein idee kann nur Aki kommen. Wäre schön wenn du mal weiterschreiben würdest,ich würde mich freuen <3

ahh that was good xD
i love reita in this fanfiction ! he is so sexy ~
awwr lovely :3

thank you very much for this ~
i want to look this 'mini movie' from the two cuties oo
shit fangirl. *laugh*

thank you, thank you, thank you ~

and i'm searching since 2006 (or 2005, dont know XD) uû
whhaa uû

i really love this ^-^

ich mag dein englisch total :3 gefällt mir wirklich ~ oo
schon seid monaten, (jahren?) suche ich FF's (nicht nur von gazette) auf englisch (weil ich ursprünglich aus frankreich komme und ich komm mit englisch i-wie mehr klar oô)

und ich stoße erst jetzt auf diese FF! uû
und ich such seid 2006 uû .. naja XD

wieder zu FF !

ich wollte jetzt nicht so scheiße sein und kein kommi da lassen :3
gerade deswegen das ich so lange drauf gewartet habe uû

ich mag dein schreibstil sehr :3 und respekt das du dich getraut hast.
dafür liebe ich dich schonmal *mit herzchen bombadier*
ich les gleich weiter :3 ~

Hey hey hey! Don't I know you~? *points finger accusingly* XD Gomen na, I would've left ya a comment on LJ but hey, since your stories are posted on both, I guess it doesn't really matter. Ima too lazy and too tired to switch to LJ right now XD Besides, mexx is where I stumbled upon those awesome fics of yours, so mexx is where I shall comment! So be it! *laughs*

Da~mn you, girl. Your Reituki is just SO what I have needed right now, I'm on utter fangirl HIGH right now. Got me all hot and bothered and also all fluffy and awww~ing. You write them GREAT! I'm still shakin with all the love and pleasure those two give each other.

Now you probably noticed from "Phoenix" that I'm someone who loves writing long and detailled (*snickers* Applies to comments as well, so YA be warned! This'll get long! Another reason I prefer mexx, actually... it doesn't have that stupid comment-length limit LJ has. I'm always having trouble with those XD) but I have to admit, your way of wording things with just the right amount of words, short and precise, is equally captivating. At some parts, I felt like a freaking newbie to smut-writing *laughs* That's something! You can be proud! I totally envied your smut-writing skills in some parts. Might be because I'm simply a sap and totally uncapable of writing Bondage, Denial, Sex Toying and stuff like that ALBEIT I like to read it when it's written as exquisitely as yours (now can you believe me that "exquisitely" took me freakin five times to type in properly and I still believe I spelled it wrong? XD That's what your sexy Reituki did to me. Complete brail failure over here...)

Now what was I saying... A yes, how much I fail at writing hardcore loving sex. I'm all for sweet and gentle and all that romantic stuff. I guess one can't have it all but LUCKILY there are people like you who are so utterly fantastic at writing heartfelt smut that can be kind of pervy and kinky and still so fond and loving. I loved each line you wrote in here (well, except the bonus chap but that's only because with an overdose of Reituki, I couldn't spare any sparkle of interest at Aoiha *sorry, boys*).

Now, now, where to start. You see? I haven't even STARTED proper commenting yet *laughs* I rarely comment on fics as it is, not because I'm arrogant or lazy (or well, I am a bi~t lazy) but because I always need like, hours to make a comment and this effort, a fic has to be worth it. Now dear, YOURS totally was. You earned yourself some word pages of my babbling, be prepared! XD Okay, brain, compose yourself, shove sleep lack and emotional excitement aside and give the girl a proper, constructive review! *brain: rattles, beeps, buzzes* Yes, I think I'm ready now.

Prolog. Loved it. Fluff all over the place, Reituki fluff, mind you, which I LOVE. Absolutely adored the last lines about poor Ru-chan's feet being all cold. So sweet! *sighs happily*

First kiss. Loved the beginning of it *laughs* Ruki, so sweet, in his dread of the e~vil camera XD Not to mention, the making out was hot as was the sex. Reita being a sexholic. Gods, suits that man SO well. Nasty enough to tape it, too... *snickers* Tsk, tsk, Reita. Gotta love him, though. Little love confession at the end made me melt.

I admit I was put off by some expressions you used during the smex scenes in the whole fic, like cock and (my most hated word altogether - dick *wrinkles nose*) BUT you used it in ways too sweet to actually be bothered much by it, even for my whacky, sensetive psyche. Another note, I absolutely adore Reita calling Ruki baby. Makes me grin like an idiot each time I read it.

Second Kiss. Aaaaah! The "LEECH" reference at the beginning! XDD Gods, awesome. Now I'll never be able to listen to that song without some fluffy/nasty thoughts bothering my mind. Drunk Ruki = win. Sexholic, dominating, controlling Reita doing drunk, beautiful Ruki in a toilet cabin - EPIC win. Congrats. You won yourself a spazzy fangirm moment from my side xP

I absolutely approve of the idea of you explaining about their past in between all that hotness and smexiness going on. It makes one feel like one'd known that pairing written by you for AGES, even from the first couple of chapters on. Way to make your readers addictive! *laughs*

Third kiss. Reituki morning snuggling in bed equal me reading with heart-shaped eyes. I love how you make even the most common situations so warm and loving. So very... Reituki. They're captivating and you very well managed to seize that captivity of theirs in words and phrases. Way to go! The last part about Reita smiling and Ruki knowing that's why he belonged to him sucessfully melted me into a puddle of happy goo. They are so beautiful.

Now, fourth kiss. Oh my god. Reita! To quote Ruki at this point ->"God, where did he take these ideas from..?" Seriously! But I admit, it was tremendously hot and arousing. Even though poor Rei-Rei had to play his fingers sore. I bet the sight had been totally worth it *snickers* And of course, he had to tape it... Tsk, tsk. Sexholic pervert... XDD But we love him still.

Fifth kiss. A~h, the beautiful, beautiful, melancholic flashback. Totally loved it. I'm generally someone who just LOVES such things. Hey, are you sure you're not a long missed twin of mine? *laughs* Makes me badly pondering the idea of doing an RP with you. No matter if English or German, I bet it'd be some serious, powerful, addicting venture. Think about it *winks* I'd definitely be up for it! x3

Back to our sweethearts here. Aw. Ruki's first kiss and Ruki's first time has OF COURSE to be with Reita. No other option, neva! *fangirl nod* Gotta love the thought of delicate, frail virgin Ruki and strong, protective, gentle guardian Reita. I'll forever love the thought of him being all protective and possessive over his Ruki-chan.

Bonus chapter... Well, like said, I only cast a fleeting glance over it (greedily picking out the Reituki bits, of course XD Reita spilling his coffee... and there I thought Ruki was the clumsy one... XD) I'm not exactly opposed to AoixUruha (I do write them myself after all as well *laughs) but I never had been able to really befriend that pairing. Dunno... I'd still rather see Aoi with Kai or something... *laughs*

Last Chapter. AWWWWWW! Utterly sweet. Poor Ruki, tortured sweetly by his amazing lover again. In a train nonetheless! *laughs* Such a cute and hot image at the same time. Reita got protective over him at that party, eh... owned me instantly. Like said, I worship protective Reita. It gave the fiction a very wonderful, smooth ending. Marvellously done, don't you dare stopping to write them! *shakes finger at you* XD

Random note, I totally love your Ruki-styled blonde hair (if you're still wearing it like that). Just wanted to say that XD You're one pretty girl, ne~ Smart, too, as I gathered you're making (or already made?) your Abitur. I myself still have a year and a half to go till I'm done *laughs* Plus, you can write emotionally and beautifully. Makes you an adorable person in my eyes. So you keep all that up, dear!

Now, drawing a final resume. Yes. Yes, you almost made it, I'm about to wrap up my bubbly comment here. Relieved? XD

Starting from the less positive things. Okay, it's a point of a person's taste which vocabulary seems proper or improper to use for certain situations. Some harder expressions made me blush then and there but it didn't disturb the natural flow of the story. So it's all fine.

Nobody is perfect, certainly. Your English is VERY good, but a few common mistakes I noticed are, you misplace the adjectives in sentences sometimes and sometimes (I suppose that comes from the German *laughs*) you forget the apostrophe in possesive words. Like "Reitas" instead of "Reita's". Fleeting mistakes and slips of pen had been there, too but I know I myself make enough of those in my stories as well, so it's not really a point of criticism *laughs*

Aside of that, your writing style is very fluent, you wary your expressions so nothing feels like repeated countless times. Some stylistic devices, especially metaphors, you are absolutely skilful in using. The descriptions are partially very beautiful and you capture emotions perfectly. The reader is easily able to feel alongside the main characters and is effortlessly drawn right into the middle of the occurances. Surroundings, scene set ups, atmosphere - always created and described nearly flawlessly so one gets a good image of where the characters are, what they are doing and why they are doing what they are doing.

More over, a LOGICAL, sensible, rational, close-to-reality PLOT and a thought-through storyline. Heaven be my witness, I saw so many shitty fics on the web already where you could puke your guts out from the utter senselessness and stupidity of them. So works like yours are a true gem to find amidst all the rubbish that is flooding the GazettE's fandom, any fandom as a matter of fact. You have style, quality and class to your stories, an idividual touch to your writing and it is obvious and pleasant that you have your personal emotional links to the characters and situations you write about. That's how it should be, that's what makes one an author.

All in all, I'm delighted by your works, as you might have noticed already *laughs* I immensely enjoyed reading them and I'd be up to read another Reituki from you anytime. My offer stands as well, do give it a thought to try a RP with me. I'm sure we could have lots of fun with it *laughs*

Now, something else...? *taps chin* No, I think I'm pretty much done. Two hours spent on writing a comment and I'm feeling good about it. You probably deserved an even longer one, but alas, this is all my brain is capable of right now XD Please also excuse any grammar/spelling mistakes in this review - unlike my fics, I don't like going over my comments twice because I end up addding things there and then making it even longer and longer and longer *laughs* And then I'd have to look it over again and add something again and look it over and add and look it over and add and [...] I'm sure you get my point XD

So, continue just like this dear! You're a fantastic writer, a fantastic Reituki writer in fact, and I'll be looking forward to further works from you!

*thousands of cyber hugs, glomps and cuddles* *squishes tight & breathless* Keep up the magnificent work!

♥ *insert another ton of hearts here* ♥

Yours,

Kate

SUPER *_______* Ich liebe so ne Flashback-Sachen >///////<
Das ist so niedlich und so schön x333333333
Und ich wiederhol mich und wiederhol mich XDDD
Egal **
Mir gefällt es. Es muss richtig viel Arbeit sein in Englisch zu schreiben uU
Hast du aber fein gemacht XD <3
Lg
Fayn

Fand es ebenfalls klasse *________*
Ich weiß gar nicht was ich immer schreiben soll XD, ich wiederhol mich voll XD

Wie süüüß <33 Mehr fällt mir dazu echt nicht ein *____*
lg
fayn

Auch sehr schön *_* Wirklich gut x33

yaaa Lemon in Englisch ist immer toll *_____*
Liest sich erneut wundervoll x3

Well done x3
Also mir gefällt es und auf den ersten Blick keine gravierenden Fehler. Angenehm flüssig zu lesen x3
Englisch ist einfach schön zu lesen *hach* **
x3